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Maybe by Lanko, Joseph Jiya

28/12/2017

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Maybe how you jolt my heart with a single touch
Maybe how my heart cease when your hand goes off 
 
Maybe how you ease my demons with your stare
Maybe how they grieve when your eyes goes off 
 
Maybe how you lift my burden with your presence 
Maybe how I can't lift the dead weight when you take off 
 
Maybe I'm under the influence of marijuana 
Maybe, these are my compulsive emotions for you 

Lanko, Joeseph Jiya is a Nigerian writer and this poem is a submission received from the July 2017 SLM 1 year anniversary poetry contest.
5 Comments
Azeeza
8/1/2018 04:18:12 pm

I like the second stanza. He and his demons are both recipient of the feels.
The last stanza is lit too, the analogy between marijuana and compulsive emotions just made other stanzas resonate deeper.
But I think the first three stanzas would be better without the 'Maybe' word or not.

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Kika link
19/1/2018 01:27:00 pm

First line, Fourth paragraph, is about the only maybe I can attest to. The rest are via influence by the attestation of that line. Maybe not.

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Tola
19/1/2018 11:45:39 pm

It's a beautiful piece. It resonates with the uncertainity that comes with love. The last stanza sums it up correctly

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Titi Dokubo link
21/1/2018 02:33:11 am

Just maybe we will find someone who has this effect on us or maybe not

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Rachael
22/1/2018 04:45:33 pm

I understood the general theme of the poem-feelings that can't be controlled. But I feel the rhythm is off, with just the last line from the last stanza holding the whole piece together.

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